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Message de s4nd posté le 15-01-2013 à 16:48:48 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous!
Je souhaite partir au Royaume-Uni pour trouver mon premier emploi là bas. J'ai donc rédigé mon CV au format britannique, je l'ai retravaillé une bonne vingtaine de fois mais n'étant pas bilingue, j'aurais souhaité avoir votre avis (vocabulaire, tournure des phrases, ...) pour pouvoir l'améliorer.
Je vous remercie par avance beaucoup pour votre aide!
Hello,
I am looking for a position in the UK, but I don't know if my enclosed CV is correct or not. I would be grateful if you could help me to correct the mistakes.
Thank you very much for your time and your help!
STRUCTURAL ENGINEER
3 years in a construction company
Experience with Eurocodes
Practice of CAD and FEM software (AutoCAD, ROBOT,...)
Good analytical and teamwork skills
Available immediately
ABOUT ME
French National
25 years old
Driving license
Looking for an international mobility
___________________________________________________________________________
OBJECTIVE
Obtain a position as a structural engineer in a technical consultancy office to work within a team on designing various type of challenging structures.
____________________________________________________________________________
EDUCATION
Degree specialized in Structural Design 2011-2012
CHEC, xxx
Postgraduate high level technical training.
Main fields of studies : strength of materials, design of reinforced, prestressed concrete, steel and composite structures, geotechnics, ...
Master’s Degree in Civil Engineering 2008-2011
INSA (Engineering School), xxx
Main fields of studies : concrete structures, building physics and acoustics, public works, eco-design, timber structures, urban planning, contracts, …
CPGE, xxx 2005-2008
Preparation for national competitive entrance exams to French “Grandes Ecoles”.
Baccalauréat Scientifique 2005
High school diploma in sciences, with honours.
____________________________________________________________________________________
PROJECTS
In accordance with the European standards:
CHEC 2012
Viaduct over the Rhone, Lyon - SETEC TPI (1.5 month)
Prestressed concrete bridge, cantilevered built, box girder, 7 spans, 540 yd length, 27 yd width, 12500 yd3 of concrete, 1300t of reinforcing steel, 500t of prestressing cables.
We had to do the section preliminary design, calculate the prestressing and check the stress during the construction and in use.
Penitentiary “les Baumettes”, Marseille - EIFFAGE (1 month)
Based on the drawings of the architect, we had to design the supporting structure of buildings in accordance with standards. We took into account the results of the soil survey and seismic design.
INSA 2008 – 2011
5 levels residential building in reinforced concrete (1 month)
Industrial building with a steel and timber structure (1 month)
Project of shelter and rehabilitation center for homeless based on eco-construction, presented in English (2 months)
__________________________________________________________________________________
WORK EXPERIENCE - APPRENTICESHIP
HEAVEN CLIMBER, xxx
Annual turnover : 67M €, 26 branches in metropolitan France and overseas departments and territories.
Main fields : supporting structures, work involving difficult access, foundations and special foundations, civil engineering.
Site manager apprentice (5 months) 03/2011 – 07/2011
Construction of a workshop (steel structure), workshop area : 1730yd², amount : £5 M.
Construction of a hydraulic structure (fish ladder), amount : £130,000.
- Defined the requirements,
- Met suppliers and subcontractors,
- Planned the construction,
- Managed the teams,
- Managed financially and technically the sites.
Skills gained: knowledge of the field, interpersonal and organizational skills, ability to work on schedule.
Estimator apprentice (2.5 years) 09/2008 – 02/2011
I was responsible for contracts from £10,000 to £ 1M.
Main fields : refurbishment of water towers, hydroelectric power plants, water supply, retaining walls, bridges, special foundations, etc.
- Prepared the quotations,
- Did technical proposals,
- Scheduled the works
- Looked for suppliers and subcontractors.
I also participated in an international project in xxxx - Design and construction of a penstock, amount £4 M.
Skills gained : ability to read and interpret plans and specifications, organizational skills, ability to work under pressure.
_________________________________________________________________________________
VOLUNTEER WORK
CHEC 2011-2012
Looked for sponsors to fund a study trip to xxx :
- 60 students
- 1 week in xxx
- Site visited : xxx, ...
We got 40 000 € (£ 32 000) funding.
Delegate of the student
I was the mediator between the students and the school management.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 15-01-2013 21:06
Anonymat
Message de s4nd posté le 15-01-2013 à 16:48:48 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous!
Je souhaite partir au Royaume-Uni pour trouver mon premier emploi là bas. J'ai donc rédigé mon CV au format britannique, je l'ai retravaillé une bonne vingtaine de fois mais n'étant pas bilingue, j'aurais souhaité avoir votre avis (vocabulaire, tournure des phrases, ...) pour pouvoir l'améliorer.
Je vous remercie par avance beaucoup pour votre aide!
Hello,
I am looking for a position in the UK, but I don't know if my enclosed CV is correct or not. I would be grateful if you could help me to correct the mistakes.
Thank you very much for your time and your help!
STRUCTURAL ENGINEER
3 years in a construction company
Experience with Eurocodes
Practice of CAD and FEM software (AutoCAD, ROBOT,...)
Good analytical and teamwork skills
Available immediately
ABOUT ME
French National
25 years old
Driving license
Looking for an international mobility
___________________________________________________________________________
OBJECTIVE
Obtain a position as a structural engineer in a technical consultancy office to work within a team on designing various type of challenging structures.
____________________________________________________________________________
EDUCATION
Degree specialized in Structural Design 2011-2012
CHEC, xxx
Postgraduate high level technical training.
Main fields of studies : strength of materials, design of reinforced, prestressed concrete, steel and composite structures, geotechnics, ...
Master’s Degree in Civil Engineering 2008-2011
INSA (Engineering School), xxx
Main fields of studies : concrete structures, building physics and acoustics, public works, eco-design, timber structures, urban planning, contracts, …
CPGE, xxx 2005-2008
Preparation for national competitive entrance exams to French “Grandes Ecoles”.
Baccalauréat Scientifique 2005
High school diploma in sciences, with honours.
____________________________________________________________________________________
PROJECTS
In accordance with the European standards:
CHEC 2012
Viaduct over the Rhone, Lyon - SETEC TPI (1.5 month)
Prestressed concrete bridge, cantilevered built, box girder, 7 spans, 540 yd length, 27 yd width, 12500 yd3 of concrete, 1300t of reinforcing steel, 500t of prestressing cables.
We had to do the section preliminary design, calculate the prestressing and check the stress during the construction and in use.
Penitentiary “les Baumettes”, Marseille - EIFFAGE (1 month)
Based on the drawings of the architect, we had to design the supporting structure of buildings in accordance with standards. We took into account the results of the soil survey and seismic design.
INSA 2008 – 2011
5 levels residential building in reinforced concrete (1 month)
Industrial building with a steel and timber structure (1 month)
Project of shelter and rehabilitation center for homeless based on eco-construction, presented in English (2 months)
__________________________________________________________________________________
WORK EXPERIENCE - APPRENTICESHIP
HEAVEN CLIMBER, xxx
Annual turnover : 67M €, 26 branches in metropolitan France and overseas departments and territories.
Main fields : supporting structures, work involving difficult access, foundations and special foundations, civil engineering.
Site manager apprentice (5 months) 03/2011 – 07/2011
Construction of a workshop (steel structure), workshop area : 1730yd², amount : £5 M.
Construction of a hydraulic structure (fish ladder), amount : £130,000.
- Defined the requirements,
- Met suppliers and subcontractors,
- Planned the construction,
- Managed the teams,
- Managed financially and technically the sites.
Skills gained: knowledge of the field, interpersonal and organizational skills, ability to work on schedule.
Estimator apprentice (2.5 years) 09/2008 – 02/2011
I was responsible for contracts from £10,000 to £ 1M.
Main fields : refurbishment of water towers, hydroelectric power plants, water supply, retaining walls, bridges, special foundations, etc.
- Prepared the quotations,
- Did technical proposals,
- Scheduled the works
- Looked for suppliers and subcontractors.
I also participated in an international project in xxxx - Design and construction of a penstock, amount £4 M.
Skills gained : ability to read and interpret plans and specifications, organizational skills, ability to work under pressure.
_________________________________________________________________________________
VOLUNTEER WORK
CHEC 2011-2012
Looked for sponsors to fund a study trip to xxx :
- 60 students
- 1 week in xxx
- Site visited : xxx, ...
We got 40 000 € (£ 32 000) funding.
Delegate of the student
I was the mediator between the students and the school management.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 15-01-2013 21:06
Anonymat
Réponse: CV correction/aide de bluestar, postée le 15-01-2013 à 23:25:20 (S | E)
Hello...
Apart from a few minor errors I can't find anything wrong with the grammar of your letter. But I think you should try to make your personal qualities and the skills you have acquired a lot more prominent, by detailing them in a separate "cover" letter to accompany the CV. The cover letter and the CV would then complement each other. At present the information about skills acquired is almost buried in the information you provide about the jobs you have done. In the cover letter you should say "I am highly motivated and adaptable with excellent skills and experience" etc, and then go on to list your skills in detail. You need to emphasise them a lot more than you have done.
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"an international mobility"
"...designing various type (pluriel)"
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Cordialement...
Réponse: CV correction/aide de s4nd, postée le 16-01-2013 à 17:33:02 (S | E)
Thank you very much for your quick response and your advice!
I corrected "international mobility" by removing the "an" (uncountable I guess ...) added the "s" to "type", and replaced "z" by "s" in specialized for instance(I've heard "z" was american an "s" british...).
I also removed "skills gained" of my CV by following your advice and then modified my cover letter.
Could you give me your opinion on the letter below? (I feel that I am asking a lot...)
Thank you very much!
__________
Dear Mr. X,
Your client is looking for an ambitious and experienced Structural Engineer for his office in London. I belive that I am the right person for this position.
I hold a Master's Degree in Civil Engineering and a Degree specialised in Structural Design, obtained in French top engineering schools.
During my curriculum, I used to perform structural design and analysis calculations on many projects, including buildings and bridges. With 4 years of practise, I gained a solid knowledge of the Eurocodes, and good skills in CAD and FEM softwares like AutoCAD or ROBOT.
Moreover, through the course in apprenticeship in my engineering school (INSA of Toulouse), I got a 3 years experience in a construction company. The practice of several trades as an estimator and as a junior site manager, enhanced my interpersonnal and organisational skills, as well as my ability to work under pressure. It also led me to work with different stakeholders, that allows me today to consider a project in its entirety, therefore adapt my engineer work to the field reality.
Very motivated to collaborate as a structural engineer on challenging projects, I feel that my teamwork skills and my experience with the new standards will be an asset for your client’s agency.
For more details please find my CV attached and of course, I will be glad to answer any questions that you might have. I can be contacted on my mobile phone at xxx or by email at xxxx
Thank you for your time and consideration.
Sincerely,
S.
Réponse: CV correction/aide de bluestar, postée le 16-01-2013 à 18:05:27 (S | E)
Your client is looking for an ambitious and experienced Structural Engineer for his office in London. I believe that I am the right person for this position.
I hold a Master's Degree in Civil Engineering and a Degree specialised in Structural Design, obtained in French top French engineering schools.
During my curriculum, In the course of my career to date I have used to performed structural design and analysis calculations on many projects, including buildings and bridges. With 4 years of practise, I gained a solid knowledge of the Eurocodes, and good skills in CAD and FEM softwares like AutoCAD or ROBOT.
Moreover, through the course in apprenticeship in my engineering school (INSA of Toulouse), I got a had 3 years experience in a construction company. The practice of several trades as an estimator and as a junior site manager, enhanced my interpersonnal and organisational skills, as well as my ability to work under pressure. It also led me to work with different stakeholders, and this that allows me today to consider a project in its entirety, therefore and therefore to adapt my engineer work to the field reality.
I am very Very motivated to collaborate as a structural engineer on challenging projects, and I feel that my teamwork skills and my experience with the new standards will be an asset for your client’s agency.
For more details please find my CV attached and of course, I will be glad to answer any questions that you might have. I can be contacted on my mobile phone at xxx or by email at xxxx
Thank you for your time and consideration.
Sincerely,
S.
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Bonjour,
I think your new application is a lot more focussed than the previous one. I have suggested some minor alterations to it. Good luck!
Réponse: CV correction/aide de s4nd, postée le 16-01-2013 à 21:37:45 (S | E)
Thank you again for your feedback! I'm ready to apply now
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