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Message de raskoln posté le 19-01-2016 à 17:09:07 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
je travaille depuis plusieurs jours sur une lettre de motivation en anglais. Je souhaiterais avoir un retour sur l'orthographe et la syntaxe pour savoir si je peux commencer à l'envoyer.
D'avance merci
Dear ……,
I am a french trainee lawyer graduated in international business law at Aix-Marseille University and am writing to apply for an internship position in your corporate/M&A department, starting between July and September this year, for a duration up to 6 months.
I have previously interned at Smith's office in Paris where I was part of the private equity/M&A department. I have also interned at DC and Partners and learnt the basics of legal drafting. Furthermore, during my studies I specialized in corporate law by obtaining a corporate counsel diploma.
I'm convinced that interning in a dynamic law firm like …... would allow me to develop my expertise, and I feel confident that I could contribute substantively to the work of your office while strengthening the skills I'll need for a career in corporate law.
I am attaching my resume for your kind perusal and will be grateful if I am given an opportunity to intern at your firm. Please let me know if your require anything else as part of the internship application. Thank you for your time and consideration.
Sincerely Yours,
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Modifié par lucile83 le 19-01-2016 22:09
Message de raskoln posté le 19-01-2016 à 17:09:07 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
je travaille depuis plusieurs jours sur une lettre de motivation en anglais. Je souhaiterais avoir un retour sur l'orthographe et la syntaxe pour savoir si je peux commencer à l'envoyer.
D'avance merci
Dear ……,
I am a french trainee lawyer graduated in international business law at Aix-Marseille University and am writing to apply for an internship position in your corporate/M&A department, starting between July and September this year, for a duration up to 6 months.
I have previously interned at Smith's office in Paris where I was part of the private equity/M&A department. I have also interned at DC and Partners and learnt the basics of legal drafting. Furthermore, during my studies I specialized in corporate law by obtaining a corporate counsel diploma.
I'm convinced that interning in a dynamic law firm like …... would allow me to develop my expertise, and I feel confident that I could contribute substantively to the work of your office while strengthening the skills I'll need for a career in corporate law.
I am attaching my resume for your kind perusal and will be grateful if I am given an opportunity to intern at your firm. Please let me know if your require anything else as part of the internship application. Thank you for your time and consideration.
Sincerely Yours,
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Modifié par lucile83 le 19-01-2016 22:09
Réponse: Correction/ Cover letter de gerondif, postée le 19-01-2016 à 19:13:01 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
je vois peu d'erreurs, c'est du solide!
erreurs en bleu, corrections en vert
Dear ……,
I am a french (majuscule) trainee lawyer who graduated in international business law at Aix-Marseille University and I am writing to apply for an internship position in your corporate/M&A department, starting between July and September this year, for a duration up to 6 months.
I have previously interned at Smith's office in Paris where I was part of the private equity/M&A department. I have also interned at DC and Partners and learnt the basics of legal drafting. Furthermore, during my studies I specialized in corporate law by obtaining a corporate counsel diploma.
I'm convinced that interning in a dynamic law firm like …... would (will serait plus volontaire, si vous mettez would, ce conditionnel implique que vous pensez qu'ils pourraient ne pas vous prendre alors que vous semblez tout-à-fait qualifié) allow me to develop my expertise, and I feel confident that I could (idem, can) contribute substantively to the work of your office while strengthening the skills I('ll) need (un présent passerait bien aussi) for a career in corporate law.
I am attaching my resume for your kind perusal and will be grateful if I am given an opportunity to intern at your firm. Please let me know if your(you) require anything else as part of the internship application. Thank you for your time and consideration.
Sincerely Yours,(dans l'autre sens, c'est plus courant)
Réponse: Correction/ Cover letter de raskoln, postée le 19-01-2016 à 20:38:01 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup !!!!
Je vais m'empresser de corriger tout ça !
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