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Message de dadoush35 posté le 05-11-2018 à 09:59:09 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
je vous envoie ce message car j'ai fait un petit texte et aimerais savoir s'il y a des erreurs. Pourriez-vous m'aider s'il vous plait ?
A woman is calling her father (he’s between 70-80 I guess) to tell him that her and her family won’t come this year for Christmas, but she promises they’ll come next year. It is really touching. The old man is alone for Christmas, in a big table.
Later in the video, his children learn that he is dead so they are sad and they go to his home.
When they arrive, they can see the big table I mentioned earlier but with cuttery. This table seems to be ready to welcome people for a big diner.
Suddenly, the grandfather appear and that was the only way to see them altogether. He let them believe that he was dead so in that way they would come to his home.
At the end, they are all very happy to share this meal.
Je vous remercie de votre aide!
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Edited by lucile83 on 05-11-2018 10:56
Message de dadoush35 posté le 05-11-2018 à 09:59:09 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
je vous envoie ce message car j'ai fait un petit texte et aimerais savoir s'il y a des erreurs. Pourriez-vous m'aider s'il vous plait ?
A woman is calling her father (he’s between 70-80 I guess) to tell him that her and her family won’t come this year for Christmas, but she promises they’ll come next year. It is really touching. The old man is alone for Christmas, in a big table.
Later in the video, his children learn that he is dead so they are sad and they go to his home.
When they arrive, they can see the big table I mentioned earlier but with cuttery. This table seems to be ready to welcome people for a big diner.
Suddenly, the grandfather appear and that was the only way to see them altogether. He let them believe that he was dead so in that way they would come to his home.
At the end, they are all very happy to share this meal.
Je vous remercie de votre aide!
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Edited by lucile83 on 05-11-2018 10:56
Réponse : Texte/correction de laure95, postée le 05-11-2018 à 14:05:41 (S | E)
Bonjour,
- to tell him that her and her family inverser her avec and her family)won’t come this year for Christmas
- The old man is alone for Christmas, in a big table (je ne comprends pas: "in a big table").
- When they arrive, they can see the big table I (have) mentioned earlier but with cuttery.
- Suddenly, the grandfather appear (faute de conjugaison)
Réponse : Texte/correction de dadoush35, postée le 07-11-2018 à 09:26:21 (S | E)
Merci pour votre aide!
"To tell him that her familly won't come this year for Christmas"
"I have mentionned"
"the grandfather appears"
Et en fait pour la table, c'est une table qui est longue, et lui il est tout seul au bout de la table.
Merci beaucoup, et bonne journée!
Réponse : Texte/correction de laure95, postée le 07-11-2018 à 15:45:55 (S | E)
Bonjour,
si vous voulez dire que l'homme est tout seul au bout de la table, ne pas mettre alors "in a big table" mais " at the head of the table" (cf reverso).
Réponse : Texte/correction de koreen2012, postée le 08-11-2018 à 03:34:11 (S | E)
Bonjour
pour compléter votre travail
"cuttery" (mal orthographié)
that her and her family --> inverser her family and s-- won't....
have a great day!
Réponse : Texte/correction de bluestar, postée le 08-11-2018 à 10:28:48 (S | E)
hello...
a big dinner, pas diner
Réponse : Texte/correction de dadoush35, postée le 08-11-2018 à 11:29:37 (S | E)
Merci pour toutes ces aides apportées, c'est corrigé!
Bonne journée!
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