Let's Suggest/30

Let's Suggest/30
Message de here4u posté le 08-01-2023 à 23:36:58 (S | E | F)
Hello, dear workers!

Here is the new topic for you to write about... I hope many will participate enthusiastically... This topic is a little more difficult than the preceding ones...

You mustn't be afraid of making mistakes... We LOVE mistakes, because they give us an opportunity to explain and correct!

Here is today's topic, seen in the press while I was reading...

"Who are you? Describe yourselves, either physically, or telling us about your qualities and flaws." (150 to 170 words) (No confession is required... You may invent any characteristic or trait. You may also choose humour, irony, caricature, parody, etc.) You have FREEDOM...


Voici le rappel des modalités de la première partie de l'exercice :
1. Je vous demande une EXPRESSION sur le sujet proposé à m’envoyer en mp dès que possible …
2. Le plus tôt possible, cette première expression sera publiée sur le Forum, et CHACUN sera libre de « corriger » UNE FOIS ( en collant le texte et indiquant les erreurs EN BLEU, et en soulignant ce qui vous semble maladroit et que vous voudriez changer, sans donner la « correction » (forme correcte), à ce moment là, comme il se doit.) Si un autre membre a déjà indiqué des erreurs en bleu, VOUS DEVEZ repartir de cette correction et la confirmer ou la corriger ... Un seul devoir à la fois sera publié pour corriger … Vous pourrez ensuite donner vos suggestions de correction (en vert!)

IMPORTANT! Pour me faciliter le transfert de vos travaux sur le site, pourriez vous m'indiquer par un "(" la correction qui s'impose à vous, s'il vous plaît ?
ie. (I'm repeating for years... ou (was not only to want something,... Pourquoi ? Simplement parce que le site ne "garde" pas les indications de couleurs ou de soulignement etc. dès que l'on copie ... Donc, je prends vos travaux, je les corrige avec les codes "bleu" ou "souligné" ou "vert", mais au moment où je vous poste la correction, je perds tout mon travail ... et dois tout refaire mot à mot avec deux fenêtres ou même deux écrans pour un travail fastidieux de copie point par point ... Merci de votre aide !

Les modalités complètes sont accessibles sur le lien suivant :
Lien internet


( Je vous les rappellerai au fur et à mesure de la progression du travail )
Cet exercice sera ... ce que vous en ferez : ou ou Do your best, I trust You!
Correction en ligne le mardi 24 janvier 2023.
J'attends vos envois en mp et publierai le premier dès que possible.

MAY THE FORCE BE WITH YOU and with US!

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Réponse : Let's Suggest/30 de here4u, postée le 09-01-2023 à 21:39:10 (S | E)
Hello dears!

Here is EXPRESSION N°1! That was quick, wasn't it? Please indicate possible mistakes in blue, and underline what you think is clumsy...

I was born in April several decades ago, and though I'm not very interested in astronomy, I must admit that I have a real Aries personality: willing, enterprising, bold and sporty.
You will tell me:" Good things! "Sure, but these qualities can easily turn into flaws. The volunteer becomes stubborn quickly, and the go-getter often lacks of discernment.
How many times have I regretted not weighing the pros and the cons before embarking on an adventure?
I am also very direct, and I can't hide very long when someone or something doesn't please me. Being frank is a good thing, but lacking of diplomacy can play tricks or make others feel bad.
My friends will say that I am faithful in love as in friendship, I am generous and I have a good heart. Yet, I look askance at those who step on my toes!
I hope, if we meet, you won't run away because of my temper. 158 words

for your help!

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Réponse : Let's Suggest/30 de maxwell, postée le 10-01-2023 à 20:13:55 (S | E)
Hello!

EXPRESSION 1: Mistakes and clumsiness:
I was born in April several decades ago, and though I'm not very interested in astronomy, I must admit that I have a real Aries personality: willing, enterprising, bold and sporty.
You will tell me:" Good things! "Sure, but these qualities can easily turn into flaws. The (volunteer becomes stubborn quickly, and the go-getter often lacks (of discernment.
How many times have I regretted not weighing the pros and the cons before embarking on an adventure?
I am also very direct, and I can't hide (XXX very long when someone or something doesn't please me. Being frank is a good thing, but lacking (of diplomacy can play tricks or make others feel bad.
My friends will say that I am faithful in love as in friendship, I am generous and I have a good heart. Yet, I look askance at those who step on my toes!
I hope, if we meet, you won't run away because of my temper. 158 words

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Réponse : Let's Suggest/30 de amalia80, postée le 12-01-2023 à 07:56:03 (S | E)
Hello!

EXPRESSION 1: Mistakes and clumsiness:
I was born in April several decades ago, and though I'm not very interested in astronomy, I must admit that I have a real Aries personality: willing, enterprising, bold and sporty.
You will tell me:" Good things! "Sure, but these qualities can easily turn into flaws. The ( strong-willed person becomes stubborn quickly, and the go-getter often lacks ( discernment.
How many times have I regretted not weighing the pros and the cons before embarking on an adventure?
I am also very direct, and I can't hide ( for very long when someone or something doesn't please me. Being frank is a good thing, but lacking ( diplomacy can play tricks or make others feel bad.
My friends will say that I am faithful in love as in friendship, I am generous and I have a good heart. Yet, I look askance at those who step on my toes!
I hope, if we meet, you won't run away because of my temper. 158 words

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Réponse : Let's Suggest/30 de maxwell, postée le 12-01-2023 à 20:20:33 (S | E)
Hello!

EXPRESSION 1: Suggestions:

I was born in April several decades ago, and though I'm not very interested in (astrology, I must admit that (my personality matches my astrological sign which is Aries: (I'm willing, enterprising, bold and sporty.
You will tell me: ("These are qualities!" Sure, but (they can easily turn into flaws. (A strong-willed person becomes stubborn quickly, and (a go-getter often lacks (discernment.
How many times have I regretted not weighing the pros and the cons before embarking on an adventure?
I am also very direct, and I can't hide (it (1)very long when someone or something doesn't please me. Being frank is a good thing, but lacking (diplomacy can play tricks or make others feel bad.
My friends will say that I am faithful in love as in friendship, I am generous and I have a good heart. Yet, I look askance at those who step on my toes!
I hope, if we meet, you won't run away because of my temper. 158 words

J'ai remis les espaces aux bons endroits
(1) hide est un verbe transitif (sinon il signifie se cacher)

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Réponse : Let's Suggest/30 de amalia80, postée le 14-01-2023 à 08:29:22 (S | E)
Hello!
j'ai repris l'excellente correction de Maxwell en ajoutant juste deux petites choses.*

I was born in April several decades ago, and though I'm not very interested in (astrology, I must admit that (my personality matches my astrological sign which is Aries: (I'm willing, enterprising, bold and sporty.
You will tell me: ("These are qualities!" Sure, but (they can easily turn into flaws. (A strong-willed person *quickly

Réponse : Let's Suggest/30 de here4u, postée le 14-01-2023 à 17:12:38 (S | E)
Hello dears,

More work for you...

EXPRESSION N°2: Please help us... Indicate possible mistakes and underline what may look clumsy.

As Alphonse Karr wrote: every man has three characters: that which he exhibits, that which he has, and that which he thinks he has.
My being a very tall middle-aged man is undeniable.
Yet, you might be surprised to learn that I have always been very reserved and shy. I'm also very calm, quiet and wise. You would never see me try something dangerous or risky: extreme sports are definitely not for me! I admit I'm a stay-at-home person who prefers routine to ever-changing situations. Unfortunately, a leopard can't change its spots, can it?

Another aspect of my personality is that I don't like wasting (food, clothes, etc.). I re-use as much as possible; throwing things away to make room breaks my heart especially for objects that remind me of my childhood. I must say I'm a little nostalgic, dreamy and... romantic!
Finally, I'm extremely faithful in every area of my life, more than you would ever imagine..168 Words

Thanks for your help...

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Réponse : Let's Suggest/30 de amalia80, postée le 15-01-2023 à 08:44:24 (S | E)
hello!
EXPRESSION N°2: Indicate possible mistakes and underline what may look clumsy.

As Alphonse Karr wrote: every man has three characters: that which he exhibits, (that which he has, and (that which he thinks he has.
My being a very tall middle-aged man is undeniable.
Yet, you might be surprised to learn that I have always been very reserved and shy. I'm also very calm, quiet and wise. You ( would never see me try( something dangerous or risky: extreme sports are definitely not for me! I admit I'm a stay-at-home person who prefers routine to ever-changing situations. Unfortunately, a leopard can't change its spots, can it?

Another aspect of my personality is that I don't like wasting (food, clothes, etc.). I re-use as much as possible; throwing things away to make room breaks my heart ( x ponctuation especially for objects that remind me of my childhood. I must say I'm a little nostalgic, dreamy and... romantic!
Finally, I'm extremely faithful in every area of my life, more than you would ever imagine..168 Words

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Réponse : Let's Suggest/30 de here4u, postée le 17-01-2023 à 22:41:30 (S | E)
Hello dears!

Green required!

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Réponse : Let's Suggest/30 de here4u, postée le 21-01-2023 à 23:59:10 (S | E)
Hello dears!


Here is EXPRESSION N°3: Please, help us correct the mistakes... (indicating them in blue and underlining what is clumsy.)

When my friends tell about me, they tell I’m a good people of course, well-bread and enough polite ….
I like fun, music, dancing and eat junk food with my friends. I go running with my dog in the morning and in the evening. I live near to a little wood and we like it. I am tired and out of breathing before him, and we finish the promenades in walking… and after, we play together with sticks and little branchs which I’m throwing.
I have my dog for 5 years and we love ourselves. He has a great part in my life. I have adopted him when I seen him in a refuge. He is not very beautiful, is a bastard, but I love him really. It is very impossible I live without him. I’ll never let him. 146

for your help!

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Réponse : Let's Suggest/30 de here4u, postée le 22-01-2023 à 23:58:39 (S | E)
Hello dears!

Green allowed tomorrow morning.

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Réponse : Let's Suggest/30 de maxwell, postée le 23-01-2023 à 20:21:23 (S | E)
Hello!

EXPRESSION 3: suggestions:
When my friends (talk about me, they (say (0) I’m a good (person (1) of course, (well brought up and (rather (2) polite ….
I like fun, music, dancing and (eating(3) junk food with my friends. I go running with my dog in the morning and in the evening. I live (near (4)a little wood and we (5) like it. I am tired and out of (breath before (he is, and we (generally end up walking… (Then (6) we play together with sticks and little (branches (that I throw (7).
(I've had (8) my dog for (five years and we love (each other (9). He (plays a great part in my life. I (adopted (10) him when I (saw him in a refuge. He is not very beautiful, (he's a mongrel dog (11), but I (really (12) love him. (I can't possibly (13) live without him. I’ll never (let him down (14). 146

A noter que l'utilisation de he/him (au lieu de it) pour ce chien tant aimé par son maître est justifié

(0) to say sth / to tell sb sth
(1) en l'absence d'info, on ne peut préciser si c'est man ou woman
(2) 2 possibilités : rather/quite + adjectif ou alors : adjectif + enough
(3) c'est l'action de manger => Verbe en ING
(4) next to ou bien near sans to
(5) j'ai supposé que we était mis pour l'auteur + son chien ... (sinon, il aurait fallu préciser)
(6) plusieurs possibilités: Then / Afterwards/ After that. Mais after doit être suivi de qqch
(7) Le présent progressif impliquerait que l'auteur est en train de faire l'action. Alors qu'il s'agit d'une généralité, d'une habitude
(8) I've got a dog. Mais si on précise que la possession actuelle date depuis un certain temps, il faut le present perfect
(9) we love ourselves serait de l'amour de soi-même et non de l'amour réciproque
(10) ici, le present perfect aurait pu convenir si la phrase s'était arrêtée à :
I have adopted him. (je l'ai adopté) qui est le bilan de l'action.
Mais comme on situe précisément l'action dans le passé, le prétérit s'impose.
(11) bastard est une insulte vulgaire
(12) plusieurs possibilités : I really love him ; I love him, really I do!
(13) là encore, plusieurs possibilités : I can't/couldn't (possibly) live without him
It is absolutely impossible that I live without him (very ne convient pas. quite serait mieux)
It is impossible for me to live without him
(14) Je ne le quitterai pas => I'll never leave him
Je ne le laisserai pas tomber => I'll never let him down

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Réponse : Let's Suggest/30 de here4u, postée le 24-01-2023 à 18:19:47 (S | E)
Hello, dears!

Voici vos EXPRESSIONS et les suggestions que vous avez faites. Un grand à vous.

EXPRESSION N°1! Original text and my indications:

I was born in April several decades ago, and though I'm not very interested in astronomy, I must admit that I have a real Aries personality: willing, enterprising, bold and sporty.
You will tell me:" Good things! "Sure, but these qualities can easily turn into flaws. The volunteer becomes stubborn quickly, and the go-getter (often lacks of discernment.
How many times have I regretted not weighing the pros and the cons before embarking on an adventure?
I am also very direct, and I can't hide very long when someone or something doesn't please me. Being frank is a good thing, but (lacking of diplomacy can play tricks or make others feel bad.
My friends will say that I am faithful in love as in friendship, I am generous and I have a good heart. Yet, I look askance at those who step on my toes! [you don’t even protest ?]
I hope, if we meet, you won't run away because of my temper. 158 words. Bonne expression ! C'est bien ... We're going to help you...

EXPRESSION 1: Mistakes and clumsiness:

I was born in April several decades ago, and though I'm not very interested in astronomy, I must admit that I have a real Aries personality: willing, enterprising, bold and sporty.
You will tell me:" Good things! "Sure, but these qualities can easily turn into flaws. The (volunteer becomes stubborn quickly, and the go-getter often lacks (of discernment.[Bonne indication de faute assez « grave » !]
How many times have I regretted not weighing the pros and the cons before embarking on an adventure?
I am also very direct, and I can't hide (XXX very long when someone or something doesn't please me. Being frank is a good thing, but lacking (of diplomacy can play tricks or make others feel bad.
My friends will say that I am faithful in love as in friendship, I am generous and I have a good heart. Yet, I look askance at those who step on my toes!
I hope, if we meet, you won't run away because of my temper. 158 words Bien !


EXPRESSION 1: suggestions N°1:

I was born in April several decades ago, and though I'm not very interested in astronomy, I must admit that I have a real Aries personality: willing, enterprising, bold and sporty.
You will tell me:" Good things! "Sure, but these qualities can easily turn into flaws. The ( strong-willed personB bonne idée. becomes stubborn quickly, and the go-getter often lacks ( discernment. boff
How many times have I regretted not weighing the pros and the cons before embarking on an adventure?
I am also very direct, and I can't hide ( for very long when someone or something doesn't please me. Being frank is a good thing, but lacking ( diplomacy can play tricks or make others feel bad.
My friends will say that I am faithful in love as in friendship, I am generous and I have a good heart. Yet, I look askance at those who step on my toes!
I hope, if we meet, you won't run away because of my temper. 158 words TB

EXPRESSION 1: Suggestions:

I was born in April several decades ago, and though I'm not very interested in (astrology, I must admit that (my personality matches my astrological sign which is Aries:OK, mais un peu long … (I'm willing, enterprising, bold and sporty.
You will tell me: ("These are qualities!" Sure, but (they can easily turn into flaws. (A strong-willed person becomes stubborn quickly, and (a go-getter often lacks (discernment.
How many times have I regretted not weighing the pros and the cons before embarking on an adventure?
I am also very direct, and I can't hide (it (1)very long when someone or something doesn't please me. Being frank is a good thing, but lacking (diplomacy can play tricks or make others feel bad.
My friends will say that I am faithful in love as in friendship, I am generous and I have a good heart. Yet, I look askance at those who step on my toes!
I hope, if we meet, you won't run away because of my temper. 158 words

J'ai remis les espaces aux bons endroits
(1) hide est un verbe transitif (sinon il signifie se cacher)
My suggestions :
- un volontaire : a head-strong person
- un fonceur : a go-getter
- «A lack of money»(lack : nom) BUT «to lack money» (verbe).
«a lack of discernment»??? lack of judgement/ insight/ vision/ common sense/
- look askance; to be suspicious of/ be wary of/ distrust sth/ don’t trust sth/ to frown on stg/.
- tread on my toes/ trample on sb/ walk all over sb/

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EXPRESSION N°2 : initial text.

As Alphonse Karr wrote: every man has three characters: that which he exhibits, that which he has, and that which he thinks he has.(très lourd)
My being a very tall middle-aged man is undeniable.
Yet, you might be surprised to learn that I have always been very reserved and shy. I'm also very calm, quiet and wise. You would ? never see me try something dangerous or risky: extreme sports are definitely not for me! I admit I'm a stay-at-home person who prefers routine to ever-changing situations. Unfortunately, a leopard can't change its spots, can it?
Another aspect of my personality is that I don't like wasting (food, clothes, etc.). I re-use as much as possible; throwing things away to make room breaks my heart especially for objects that remind me of my childhood. I must say I'm a little nostalgic, dreamy and... romantic!
Finally, I'm extremely faithful in every area of my life, more than you would ever imagine..168 Words TTB BRAVO


EXPRESSION N°2: Indications N°1:

As Alphonse Karr wrote: every man has three characters: that which he exhibits, (that which he has, and (that which he thinks he has.
My being a very tall middle-aged man is undeniable.
Yet, you might be surprised to learn that I have always been very reserved and shy. I'm also very calm, quiet and wise. You ( would never see me try( something dangerous or risky: extreme sports are definitely not for me! I admit I'm a stay-at-home person who prefers routine to ever-changing situations. Unfortunately, a leopard can't change its spots, can it?

Another aspect of my personality is that I don't like wasting (food, clothes, etc.). I re-use as much as possible; throwing things away to make room breaks my heart ( x ponctuation especially for objects that remind me of my childhood. I must say I'm a little nostalgic, dreamy and... romantic!
Finally, I'm extremely faithful in every area of my life, more than you would ever imagine..168 Words TTBONNE CORRECTION


EXPRESSION N°2: suggestions N°1:

As Alphonse Karr wrote: every man has three characters: ( the one he exhibits, ( the one he has, and ( the one he thinks he has.*
My being a very tall middle-aged man is undeniable.
Yet, you might be surprised to learn that I have always been very reserved and shy. I'm also very calm, quiet and wise. You ( will TB never see me try( anything B dangerous or risky: extreme sports are definitely not for me! I admit I'm a stay-at-home person who prefers routine to ever-changing situations. Unfortunately, a leopard can't change its spots, can it?

Another aspect of my personality is that I don't like wasting (food, clothes, etc.). I re-use as much as possible; throwing things away to make room breaks my heart( ,OK especially for objects that remind me of my childhood. I must say I'm a little nostalgic, dreamy and... romantic!
Finally, I'm extremely faithful in every area of my life, more than you would ever imagine..168 Words TTB (TB correction et texte)
* Je n’aime pas trop non plus l’énumération répétitive « the one…. the one… the one… » qui est quasiment aussi lourde que les formes initiales …

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EXPRESSION N°3: initial text: my indications:

When my friends (tell about me, they (tell I’m a good ( people ? of course, (well-bread and (enough polite …. ???
I like fun, music, dancing and (eat junk food with my friends. I go running with my dog in the (morning and in the (evening. I live near (to a little wood and we like it. (I am tired construction ? and out of (breathing before him, and we finish the (promenades (in walking… and (after, we play together with sticks and little (branchs which I(’m throwing.XXX XXX.
I (have my dog for 5 years and we love (ourselves. He (has a great part in my life. I have adopted him when I (seen him in a (refuge. He is not very (beautiful, is a (bastard, but I love him really. It is (very impossible I live without him. I’ll never (let him. 146
Beaucoup de « petites » fautes basiques … Etourderie ? car beaucoup pouvaient être corrigées seul … Attention surtout à la proposition infinitive … Courage !

EXPRESSION 3: Mistakes and clumsiness:

When my friends (tell about me, they (tell I’m a good (people of course, (well-bread and (enough polite ….
I like fun, music, dancing and (eat junk food with my friends. I go running with my dog in the (morning and in the (evening. I live (near to a little wood and we like it. I am tired and out of (breathing before him, and we finish the promenades (in walking… and (after, we play together with sticks and little (branchs which (I’m throwing.xxx xxx.
I (have my dog for 5 years and we love (ourselves. He (has a great part in my life. I (have adopted him when I (seen him in a (refuge. He is not (very beautiful, (is a (bastard, but I love him (really. It is (very (impossible I live without him. I’ll never (let him. 146 words

EXPRESSION 3: Mistakes and clumsiness:

When my friends(tell about me, they(tell I’m a good(people of course, well( bread and(enough polite ….
I like fun, music, dancing and ( eat junk food with my friends. I go running with my dog in the (morning and in the (evening. I live near (to a little wood and we like it. I am tired and out of ( breathing before him, and we finish ( the promenades ( in walking… and( after, we play together with sticks and little( branchs which I( 'm throwing.xxx xxx.
I (have my dog for 5 years and we love(ourselves . He( has a great part in my life. I have adopted him when I( seen him in a (refuge. He is not (very beautiful, is a (bastard, but I love him ( really . It is very impossible( I live without him. I’ll never( let him. 146 words

EXPRESSION 3: suggestions N°1:

When my friends( talk about me, they( say I’m a good( person of course, well( behaved and( quite polite ….
I like fun, music, dancing and ( eating junk food with my friends. I go running with my dog in the morning and in the evening. I live near ( a little wood and we like it. I am tired and out of (breath before him, and we finish ( the walks ( by walking… and( then, we play together with sticks and little( branches which I( throw .
I ('ve had my dog for 5 years TTB and we love(each other . He( is a great part of my life.(est-ce ce que l’auteur a voulu dire ?)I adopted him when I( saw him in a (refuge. He is not very beautiful, is a (bastard, but I really love him ( . It is very impossible( for me to live without him. I’ll never( leave him. 146

Une TB correction. Les fautes sont corrigées, mais il faut oser indiquer ET TRANSFORMER les maladresses, les expressions qui trahissent à coup sûr un apprenant …

EXPRESSION 3: suggestions N°2:

When my friends (talk about me, they (say (0) I’m a good (person (1) of course, (well brought up and (rather (2) polite ….Bien.
I like fun, music, dancing and (eating(3) junk food with my friends. I go running with my dog in the (morning and in the (evening. I live (near (4)a little wood and we (5) like it. I am tired and out of (breath before (he is,(Bien amélioré, mais on peut encore mieux faire sans trahir l’auteur …) and we (generally end up walking…B (Then (6) we play together with sticks and little (branches (that I throw (7) [and what about the dog?].
(I've had (8) my dog for (five years B and we love (each other (9). He (plays a great part in my life.B I (adopted (10) him when I (saw him in a (refuge. He is not very beautiful [Ca, ça ne va pas du tout …], (he's a mongrel (dog) (11), but I (really (12) love him. (I can't possibly (13) live without him. I’ll never (let him down TTB (14). 146

A noter que l'utilisation de he/him (au lieu de it) pour ce chien tant aimé par son maître est justifiée [Je crois aussi…]

(0) to say sth / to tell sb sth/ [to speak/ talk about somebody]
(1) en l'absence d'info, on ne peut préciser si c'est man ou woman [OK !]
(2) 2 possibilités [pas vraiment]: rather/quite + adjectif ou alors : adjectif + enough [j’aurais choisi « quite »…] Lien internet

Lien internet

(3) c'est l'action de manger => Verbe en ING [C’est un gérondif : valeur de nom qui signifie « le fait de manger ».]
(4) next to ou bien near sans to OUI.
(5) j'ai supposé que «we» était mis pour l'auteur + son chien ... (sinon, il aurait fallu préciser) [je pense comme toi !]
(6) plusieurs possibilités: Then / Afterwards/ After that. Mais after doit être suivi de qqch [de quoi ?]
(7) Le présent progressif impliquerait que l'auteur est en train de faire l'action. Alors qu'il s'agit d'une généralité, d'une habitude. [Oui, mais il y a mieux … ]
(8) I've got a dog. Mais si on précise que la possession actuelle date depuis un certain temps, il faut le present perfect
(9) we love ourselves serait de l'amour de soi-même et non de l'amour réciproque B
(10) ici, le present perfect aurait pu convenir si la phrase s'était arrêtée à :
I have adopted him. (je l'ai adopté) qui est le bilan de l'action.Oui.
Mais comme on situe précisément l'action dans le passé, le prétérit s'impose.OUI
(11) bastard est une insulte vulgaire [C’est vrai, mais pas seulement !... Lien internet

(12) plusieurs possibilités : I really love him; I love him, really I do! OK
(13) là encore, plusieurs possibilités : I can't/couldn't (possibly) live without him
It is absolutely impossible that I live without him (very ne convient pas. quite serait mieux) It is impossible for me to live without him
GrammarImpossible is not used with ‘very’. You say:It was an absolutely impossible task.✗Don’t say: It was a very impossible task.
Lien internet

(14) Je ne le quitterai pas => I'll never leave him
Je ne le laisserai pas tomber => I'll never let him down

Excellente correction ! Bravo !

Comme toujours, vous aurez la possibilité de faire le Follow up Work pour tout ou partie de cet exercice, en fonction de ce qu'il vous
semble nécessaire de retravailler ... ou qui vous paraît encore obscur.
Bravo, en tout cas, aussi bien pour les expressions que pour les corrections que vous en avez faites ... C'est du bon travail !

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Réponse : Let's Suggest/30 de here4u, postée le 29-01-2023 à 11:06:52 (S | E)
Hello dears,

Voici la "correction" de vos Follow up Work exercices.


Réponse : Let's Suggest/30 de maxwell, postée le 28-01-2023 à 08:10:57 (S | E)
Hello!
Follow-up work:

EXPRESSION 1: Final suggestions:

I was born in April several decades ago, and though I'm not very interested in astrology, I must admit that my personality matches my astrological sign(: Aries… I'm willing, enterprising, bold and sporty.
You will tell me: "These are qualities!" Sure, but they can easily turn into flaws. A strong-willed person becomes stubborn quickly, and a go-getter often lacks (insight.
How many times have I regretted not weighing the pros and the cons before embarking on an adventure?
I am also very direct, and I can't hide it very long when someone or something doesn't please me.* Being frank is a good thing, but lacking diplomacy can play tricks or make others feel bad.
My friends will say that I am faithful in love as in friendship, I am generous and I have a good heart. Yet, I look askance at those who step on my toes!
I hope, if we meet, you won't run away because of my temper. TTB

* Pas "faux", juste "pas naturel, trop calqué ..."

EXPRESSION N°2 : final suggestions

As Alphonse Karr wrote: every man has three characters: (the character he exhibits, (the character he has, and (the character he thinks he has.(1)
My being a very tall middle-aged man is undeniable.
Yet, you might be surprised to learn that I have always been very reserved and shy. I'm also very calm, quiet and wise. You (will never see me try (anything dangerous or risky: extreme sports are definitely not for me! I admit I'm a stay-at-home person who prefers routine to ever-changing situations. Unfortunately, a leopard can't change its spots, can it?
Another aspect of my personality is that I don't like wasting (food, clothes, etc.). I re-use as much as possible; throwing things away to make room breaks my heart, especially for objects that remind me of my childhood. I must say I'm a little nostalgic, dreamy and... romantic!
Finally, I'm extremely faithful in every area of my life, more than you would ever imagine..168 Words TTB

(1) Je ne sais pas si tu trouves cela moins lourd... Et si tu trouves que c'est moins lourd, je n'ai pas compris en quoi "that which" est plus lourd. Et surtout, est-ce incorrect ? Je trouve que c'est lourd et que ça ne se dirait pas naturellement ... Incorrect, NON, bien sûr !


EXPRESSION 3: final suggestions:

When my friends talk about me, they say I’m a good person of course, well brought up and (quite polite…
I like fun, music, dancing and eating junk food with my friends. I go running with my dog (every morning and (every (1) evening. I live near a little wood and we like it. I (get tired and out of breath before (he does, and we generally end up walking… Then we play together with sticks and little branches that I throw (for him.
I've had my dog for five years and we love each other. He plays a great part in my life. I adopted him when I saw him in (an animal shelter. He is not very (good-looking, he's a mongrel (dog), but I really love him. I can't possibly live without him. I’ll never let him down


(1) Etait-ce ce que tu attendais ? Je n'ai pas compris pourquoi c'était incorrect.
(Toujours pas "incorrect" ou "faux" [On a, ici dépassé ce stade ...]- juste "maladroit" ... "lourd"... "pas naturel"...) J'aurais montré - autrement - que c'était tous les matins et tous les soirs ...)


Réponse : Let's Suggest/30 de amalia80, postée le 28-01-2023 à 11:09:22 (S | E)
hello!
Expression 1 final expression

I was born in April several decades ago, and though I'm not very interested in astrology, I must admit that my personality matches my astrological sign(: Aries… I'm willing, enterprising, bold and sporty.
You will tell me: "These are qualities!" Sure, but they can easily turn into flaws. A strong-willed person becomes stubborn quickly, and a go-getter often lacks (insight.
How many times have I regretted not weighing the pros and the cons before embarking on an adventure?
I am also very direct, and I can't hide it very long when someone or something doesn't please me. Being frank is a good thing, but lacking diplomacy can play tricks or make others feel bad.
My friends will say that I am faithful in love as in friendship, I am generous and I have a good heart. Yet, I look askance at those who ( tread on my toes!
I hope, if we meet, you won't run away because of my temper. TTB


Réponse : Let's Suggest/30 de amalia80, postée le 28-01-2023 à 12:10:33 (S | E)
hello
Expression 2 final expression

As Alphonse Karr wrote: every man has three characters: (what he exhibits, (whaT he has, and (what he thinks he has.(1)
My being a very tall middle-aged man is undeniable.
Yet, you might be surprised to learn that I have always been very reserved and shy. I'm also very calm, quiet and wise. You (will never see me try (anything dangerous or risky: extreme sports are definitely not for me! I admit I'm a stay-at-home person who prefers routine to ever-changing situations. Unfortunately, a leopard can't change its spots, can it?
Another aspect of my personality is that I don't like wasting (food, clothes, etc.). I re-use as much as possible; throwing things away to make room breaks my heart, especially for objects that remind me of my childhood. I must say I'm a little nostalgic, dreamy and... romantic!
Finally, I'm extremely faithful in every area of my life, more than you would ever imagine..168 Words TTB

1) je ne sais pas si l'emploi de what est meilleur que la répétition de "the one" mais j'essaye! Personnellement, je préfère encore "the one"... ou carrément la répétition de "the character" .... mais cela passerait mal à l'oral...


Réponse : Let's Suggest/30 de amalia80, postée le 28-01-2023 à 12:29:44 (S | E)
hello!
EXPRESSION 3: final suggestions:

When my friends talk about me, they say I'm a good person of course , well brought up and (quite) polite
I like fun, music, dancing and eating junk food with my friends. I go running with my dog (every morning and (every evening.(Meh...) I live near a little wood and we like it. I (get tired and out of breath before (he does, and we generally end up walking? Then we play together with sticks and little branches that I throw ( to him and that he brings me back.*
I've had my dog for five years and we love each other. He plays a great part in my life. I adopted him when I saw him in (an animal shelter . He is not very (good-looking, he's a mongrel/ mutt (dog), but I really love him. I can't possibly live without him. I'll never let him down. TTB

* to play fetch exprime exactement ceci !

Bravo et de ce bon travail.

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Réponse : Let's Suggest/30 de maxwell, postée le 04-02-2023 à 08:36:06 (S | E)
Hello Here4U
Merci pour tes remarques mais (en tout cas personnellement), je reste frustré de ne pas avoir tes propositions là où tu as trouvé cela maladroit

Par exemple,
expression 1 : par quoi aurais-tu remplacé :
(when someone or something doesn't please me.

expression 2, par quoi aurais-tu remplacé :
(the character he exhibits, (the character he has, and (the character he thinks he has.

expression 3, par quoi aurais-tu remplacé :
(every morning and every evening.

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Réponse : Let's Suggest/30 de here4u, postée le 07-02-2023 à 11:25:04 (S | E)
Hello dear Maxwell! [ Je commence 07/02 à 10H30. Ca va prendre temps et réflexion... PATIENCE ! ]

I certainly don't want you to get frustrated because of me... BUT, what I've been trying to make you understand whenever you asked for MY solution (in an EXPRESSION) is that there is no ideal solution. It will be MY solution... but it can't be THE solution... and my solution will be satisfactory for me, but may not be for other people...

What I find clumsy may well not be seen or heard as such by someone else... and what I would say may well be... There are hundreds of ways to develop one idea and none is right or wrong (if it doesn't contain mistakes!) The words and expressions you use correspond to what you're feeling facing a situation, at a certain moment, experiencing emotions that someone else wouldn't. (but they would have others...)

If I take your "questions" ...

Par exemple,
expression 1 : par quoi aurais-tu remplacé :
(when someone or something doesn't please me.
Je ne dirais jamais "someone doesn't please me..." Je l'ai cherché un peu partout, ai demandé autour de moi ... et pas trouvé ... mais d'autres expressions viennent à l'esprit : expressions plus "simples", moins calquées sur le français du genre : I don't like someone (Eh oui, désolée, mais c'est comme ça ! Les anglais aiment la simplicité dans la conversation...) ou "that person makes me feel uncomfortable/ ill at ease/uneasy/ etc." Il n'y a pas de "faute", mais ça ne se dit pas ... Regarde bien comment "please/ to please" s'emploie ... Lien internet



Pour ta deuxième demande, c'est plus facile à répondre :
expression 2, par quoi aurais-tu remplacé :
(the character he exhibits, (the character he has, and (the character he thinks he has.

Tu as une citation ... et si tu respectes bien les règles des citations - ce que tu n'as pas fait - la construction initiale est excellente. Elle correspond à la "traduction officielle" qui tient compte de la période où l'auteur de la phrase s'est exprimé et du style qui s'imposait dans la société à ce moment là ...

MAIS, si tu ne mets pas les guillemets de la citation, tu es censé t'approprier la citation et la reformuler "using your own words", ceux qui correspondent à notre époque et à ton état d'esprit quand tu écris ... Tu me suis ?

C'est difficile et long d'expliquer tout ça par écrit ... En classe, c'est vite fait, et on donne un exemple, on répond en direct aux questions/ objections ... il y a immédiateté et interactions, mais par message, c'est très différent ... Je ne peux pas exprimer mon ressenti à chaque mot utilisé (ce serait affreusement long, et très irrespectueux du ressenti des auteurs qui ont choisi "their right words")

3è demande :

expression 3, par quoi aurais-tu remplacé :
(every morning and every evening: plus simple et plus clair : I walk my dog/ I run with my dog/ in the mornings and in the evenings!
Ne pas oublier cet emploi du pluriel qui indique qu'une action se passe tous les matins, tous les soirs On Mondays: tous les lundis etc. Every n'est pas faux, bien sûr ...

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Réponse : Let's Suggest/30 de maxwell, postée le 09-02-2023 à 20:10:06 (S | E)
Hello!
Merci beaucoup pour ces réponses, mais pour le point 2, sans les guillemets, comment aurais-tu exprimé exactement cette idée avec tes propres mots, de façon moins "lourde" que chacune des propositions qu'on a faites ?

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Réponse : Let's Suggest/30 de here4u, postée le 10-02-2023 à 13:36:14 (S | E)
Hello dear Max!

Qu'est-ce que je dirais ? Je ne dirais pas ! pas cool...
mais s'il fallait vraiment que j'exprime cette citation en me l'appropriant, je dirais quelque chose comme :

"... the personas they show, the persons they really are, and the ones they'd wish to be..." No I definitely wouldn't write (or say) that... L'idée est claire, mais je me serais arrangée pour ne pas avoir besoin d'employer le pluriel [ne me demande pas comment, sinon, je devrais réécrire toute l'expression, et CE N'EST PAS L'EXERCICE, ni mon rôle !] Hope you'll be satisfied, (or will have understood!)

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