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Lettre de motivation anglais
Message de posté le 28-05-2009 à 12:10:54
Bonjour,
j'ai rédigé une lettre de motivation en anglais. Je pense avoir fait pas mal de fautes et il faut impérativement que je l'envoie aujourd'hui.
Une aide dans le style et la syntaxe m'aiderait énormément.
Merci beaucoup!
Dear Sir or Madame,
Presently, I have finish my year as a master student of History in xxxx, under the Erasmus program. I was able to attend lessons of journalism there. We had courses of written, Web and radio journalism. I want to be a journalist. For my future career, it is essential to have experiences. One abroad would be even more profitable to me.
I have already made a professional training within a Swiss regional newspaper, xxxxx, and I was during three months a reporter for the website of local information xxxxx.info. I am capable of writing an article, of taking press photos and of updating a website. I am opened to all propositions.
I shall be very satisfied to be able to work in Ireland. I have already visited this country once. I found adorable people and magnificent landscapes. A six-month work experience period will also allow me to improve both my personal and professional way. I would be very grateful if you would agree to give me a placement in your firm. I will do my utmost to give you satisfaction.
Yours faithfully.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 28-05-2009 13:17
notion d'urgence effacée car ce n'est pas de mise sur ce site.
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Modifié par bridg le 01-09-2009 16:15
Message de posté le 28-05-2009 à 12:10:54
Bonjour,
j'ai rédigé une lettre de motivation en anglais. Je pense avoir fait pas mal de fautes et il faut impérativement que je l'envoie aujourd'hui.
Une aide dans le style et la syntaxe m'aiderait énormément.
Merci beaucoup!
Dear Sir or Madame,
Presently, I have finish my year as a master student of History in xxxx, under the Erasmus program. I was able to attend lessons of journalism there. We had courses of written, Web and radio journalism. I want to be a journalist. For my future career, it is essential to have experiences. One abroad would be even more profitable to me.
I have already made a professional training within a Swiss regional newspaper, xxxxx, and I was during three months a reporter for the website of local information xxxxx.info. I am capable of writing an article, of taking press photos and of updating a website. I am opened to all propositions.
I shall be very satisfied to be able to work in Ireland. I have already visited this country once. I found adorable people and magnificent landscapes. A six-month work experience period will also allow me to improve both my personal and professional way. I would be very grateful if you would agree to give me a placement in your firm. I will do my utmost to give you satisfaction.
Yours faithfully.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 28-05-2009 13:17
notion d'urgence effacée car ce n'est pas de mise sur ce site.
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Modifié par bridg le 01-09-2009 16:15
Réponse: Lettre de motivation anglais de , postée le 28-05-2009 à 12:43:45
edit: je dois l'envoyer demain en fait.
Merci de vos réponses.
Réponse: Lettre de motivation anglais de , postée le 28-05-2009 à 12:46:12
Bonjour,
Je laisserai plus expérimenté que moi corriger s'il le faut. Mais comme il y a urgence, je signale une petite erreur : I have finished. J'enleverai aussi "period", j'écrirai "if you agree...".
Sinon, le niveau d'anglais me semble plus que correct.
Bonne chance,
rp
Réponse: Lettre de motivation anglais de , postée le 28-05-2009 à 12:53:10
Merci de cette réponse rapide, cependant je n'ai pas compris le remplacement de "period" par "if you agree"...
Réponse: Lettre de motivation anglais de , postée le 28-05-2009 à 13:42:08
Sorry ! Je me suis mal exprimée :
j'enleverai "period" dans la phrase : A six-month work experience period will also...
et je corrigerai : I would be very grateful if you
J'aurais aussi tendance à utiliser le present perfect dans la phrase : I (have) found adorable people and magnificent landscapes, ou bien modifier la tournure : People are adorable and landscapes are magnificent.
rp
