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Correction expression écrite ////
Message de camille2418 posté le 15-05-2014 à 18:42:34
Bonjour, je doit faire une expression écrite dont le sujet est: Do you think tourism should be restricted to preserve historical and natural sites.
Voici ce que j'ai fait:
Since the beginning of 21 century, many people are interested in the Ecology's question. Especialy a lovers of history and nature since they have afraid that the flow of tourist degrades their sites.
First we are going toward a loss of natural sites but also a loss of wildlife and will be subject to any ecological disaster. However we need protect the wildlife.
Secondly, the tourism have degraded history's sites. Indeed the fact breathing deep paints. Thus the professional make indentical reproductions of real site as the Caves of Lascaux, which closed to public in 1958. Yet is it really importante?
History is something that is past and we tell the events thanks to famous Monument but this is not essential for understanding our history. The basis of our current culture is not in the things that our ancestors built, but in the knowledge they learned and they provide us. For instance The Parthenon represents democracy, however things that the Greeks were able to do with democracy, they invented, is more important to know. Moreover,tourism is a very important activity for some countries. for example in Egypt, through the remains of the Pharaonic era,theEgyptians who work at these sites can to live almost correctly, even in Nepal, Peru, asw. Finally in my opinion, ecology is a major problem which we must be very careful, however, the closure of historic sites and natural is not a solution, never the less we know that a small gesture is not small we have 6 billion to do so. If necessary close our historical and natural sites and save our planet.
Pouvez-vous m'aider à corriger les fautes, s'il vous plait?
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Modifié par lucile83 le 15-05-2014 19:13
Il est impossible de tout reprendre; refaites votre texte entièrement et correctement, merci.
Message de camille2418 posté le 15-05-2014 à 18:42:34
Bonjour, je doit faire une expression écrite dont le sujet est: Do you think tourism should be restricted to preserve historical and natural sites.
Voici ce que j'ai fait:
Since the beginning of 21 century, many people are interested in the Ecology's question. Especialy a lovers of history and nature since they have afraid that the flow of tourist degrades their sites.
First we are going toward a loss of natural sites but also a loss of wildlife and will be subject to any ecological disaster. However we need protect the wildlife.
Secondly, the tourism have degraded history's sites. Indeed the fact breathing deep paints. Thus the professional make indentical reproductions of real site as the Caves of Lascaux, which closed to public in 1958. Yet is it really importante?
History is something that is past and we tell the events thanks to famous Monument but this is not essential for understanding our history. The basis of our current culture is not in the things that our ancestors built, but in the knowledge they learned and they provide us. For instance The Parthenon represents democracy, however things that the Greeks were able to do with democracy, they invented, is more important to know. Moreover,tourism is a very important activity for some countries. for example in Egypt, through the remains of the Pharaonic era,theEgyptians who work at these sites can to live almost correctly, even in Nepal, Peru, asw. Finally in my opinion, ecology is a major problem which we must be very careful, however, the closure of historic sites and natural is not a solution, never the less we know that a small gesture is not small we have 6 billion to do so. If necessary close our historical and natural sites and save our planet.
Pouvez-vous m'aider à corriger les fautes, s'il vous plait?
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Modifié par lucile83 le 15-05-2014 19:13
Il est impossible de tout reprendre; refaites votre texte entièrement et correctement, merci.
Réponse: Correction expression écrite //// de gerondif, postée le 15-05-2014 à 18:54:38
Bonjour,
votre texte est trop calqué sur le français et certaines traductions sont très surprenantes: (traducteur?)
breathing deep paints. La respiration abîme les peintures, oui mais a deep est un nom qui signifie un abîme, (abyss) une grande profondeur marine.
