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Correction/trip for students
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Message de trauzeur posté le 24-02-2016 à 10:04:24 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
pouvez-vous m'aider s'il vous plaît à corriger ce devoir?
Merci pour vos réponses.
The aim of this report is for is to assess student satisfaction with the trip organised by their school so that we can find out what are the good and bad things, and to make suggestions in order to improve the activities around those trips.
First of all, students were asked how they found the registration for the event. Most students felt that it was quite annoying because they had to queue for long hours to get a ticket. Sometimes it could take even 2 days to finally be registered. So the registration process was slow. They thought that the school should either have more staff in order to deal with the big number of students or, they should really think of allowing people to register online. That will help people to register even at home so simply without being stressed as compared to the registration at school.
As regards the journey, the service was quite good. Most of them felt they had a comfortable journey with good meals and drinks. The personnel was friendly. They were treated kindly. Nonetheless, the majority of student point out that there was an incident during the journey that almost ruined they journey. In fact one of the buses broke down because it had not been serviced for a long time. Luckily though, the school managed to send another bus which arrived as quick as a flash. It would be better if the buses were checked before the journeys in order to avoid those kinds of incidents.
As for the camp site, it is generally thought that it was quite an interesting and enjoyable site. The only trouble was that the security was not good enough to deal with the crowd. Having more staff in that field would be wiser. The activities around the camp site were fun but once again, children had to wait for hours to go through all the activities. Sometimes people felt bitter about it and were simply put off. Students felt that it would be wiser to set groups and to handle them separately. It would avoid people rush at the same time in one activity.
Overall, the vast majority of students felt positive about the trip. Some even thought it was an amazing experience of a lifetime and if the suggested ideas were implemented, it would be an even better place to relax and take your mind off all the stress at school.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 24-02-2016 11:12
Message de trauzeur posté le 24-02-2016 à 10:04:24 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
pouvez-vous m'aider s'il vous plaît à corriger ce devoir?
Merci pour vos réponses.
The aim of this report is for is to assess student satisfaction with the trip organised by their school so that we can find out what are the good and bad things, and to make suggestions in order to improve the activities around those trips.
First of all, students were asked how they found the registration for the event. Most students felt that it was quite annoying because they had to queue for long hours to get a ticket. Sometimes it could take even 2 days to finally be registered. So the registration process was slow. They thought that the school should either have more staff in order to deal with the big number of students or, they should really think of allowing people to register online. That will help people to register even at home so simply without being stressed as compared to the registration at school.
As regards the journey, the service was quite good. Most of them felt they had a comfortable journey with good meals and drinks. The personnel was friendly. They were treated kindly. Nonetheless, the majority of student point out that there was an incident during the journey that almost ruined they journey. In fact one of the buses broke down because it had not been serviced for a long time. Luckily though, the school managed to send another bus which arrived as quick as a flash. It would be better if the buses were checked before the journeys in order to avoid those kinds of incidents.
As for the camp site, it is generally thought that it was quite an interesting and enjoyable site. The only trouble was that the security was not good enough to deal with the crowd. Having more staff in that field would be wiser. The activities around the camp site were fun but once again, children had to wait for hours to go through all the activities. Sometimes people felt bitter about it and were simply put off. Students felt that it would be wiser to set groups and to handle them separately. It would avoid people rush at the same time in one activity.
Overall, the vast majority of students felt positive about the trip. Some even thought it was an amazing experience of a lifetime and if the suggested ideas were implemented, it would be an even better place to relax and take your mind off all the stress at school.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 24-02-2016 11:12
Réponse: Correction/trip for students de gerondif, postée le 24-02-2016 à 13:35:28 (S | E)
Bonjour,
erreurs en bleu, corrections en vert.
The aim of this report is
First of all, the students were asked how they found the registration for the event. Most students felt that it was quite annoying because they had to queue for long hours to get a ticket. Sometimes it could (even) take (up to) 2 days to finally be registered. So the registration process was slow. They thought that the school should either have more staff in order to deal with the big number of students or that they should really think of allowing people to register online. That will (would) help people to register even at home so simply without being stressed as compared to the registration at school.
As regards the journey, the service was quite good. Most of them felt they had a comfortable journey with good meals and drinks. The personnel was friendly. They were treated kindly. Nonetheless, the majority of students (most students) point out that there was an incident during the journey that almost ruined they journey. In fact one of the buses broke down because it had not been serviced for a long time. Luckily though, the school managed to send another bus which arrived (in no time) as quick as a flash. It would be better if the buses were checked before the journeys in order to avoid those kinds(à mettre au singulier) of incidents.
As for the camp site, it is generally thought that it was quite an interesting and enjoyable site. The only trouble was that the security was not good enough to deal with the crowd. Having more staff in that field would be wiser. The activities around the camp site were fun but once again, children had to wait for hours to go through all the activities. Sometimes people felt bitter about it and were simply put off. Students felt that it would be wiser to set (to divide the participants into groups) groups and to handle them separately. It would avoid people rush( prevent people from rushing) at the same time in one activity.
Overall, the vast majority of students felt positive(adverbe) about the trip. Some even thought it was an amazing experience of a lifetime (soit "an amazing experience", soit "the experience of a lifetime") and if the suggested ideas were implemented, it would be an even better place to relax and take your mind off all the stress at school.
Réponse: Correction/trip for students de trauzeur, postée le 24-02-2016 à 19:21:18 (S | E)
Merci pour ces corrections
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